"IN THINKING ABOUT A CERTAIN IDEA, MANY SENTENCES AND IDEAS CAN BE DRAWN BY USING DETAILED WORDS WITHIN THIS IDEA."
This sentence reads as being unnecessarily complex. I'm actually not even really able to comprehend what this writer is trying to say... the sentence is repetitive (the word "idea" appears three times) and doesn't convey a well-defined message to the reader (or at least me). Perhaps the writer means to say that new ideas can often develope out of an original thought? And perhaps by saying, "Many new ideas can be drawn from detailed words within an original one," may read a little better. Not sure!
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